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Many people leave their home country and go to other countries to live and work. Why is this happening? Do advantages outweigh disadvantages of this trend.

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Nowadays, living and working in a different
country
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 from their mother's land become more popular especially in
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third
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 world countries.
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reasons
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teasons
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, benefits and drawbacks related to
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 matter. The standard of health, comfort and happiness in developing countries is
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 level . In
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country
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, the government cannot provide enough sufficient fundamental needs for their
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.
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, they have to do whatever they can to escape
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 terrible situation. Leaving their home
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 and starting their new
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 abroad is the only solution.
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, living overseas,
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 need to spend a huge amount of
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. The cost of living abroad tends to be more costly.
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, residents in America have to pay taxation fees twice as much as those living in
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,Thailand. So, achieving happiness requires more
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 than they think.
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contrary
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, settlement in the
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 or the
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country
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 is an enormous opportunity for having a better
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.
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,
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 can easily find a job which can pay them the highest salary. Spending
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 length of time on working but receiving more
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 can be possible only in
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country
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, the road to
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 a billionaire is in hand.
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, living in
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a different
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country
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countries
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 can guarantee
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 are provided by
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 even if they are foreigners. To illustrate, when all over the world facing with COVID-19 pandemic outbreak, South Korea's government make sure that whoever lives in
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country
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 has a chance to get vaccinated.
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 but not least, starting
life
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 overseas,
people
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 will have more connections. They are going to know several
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international friends and colleagues
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 can help them in the future. In conclusion, even though leaving their hometown in order to work or live in
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country
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 cost a lot of
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 but it is worth
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spending it because
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 can give more advantages than disadvantages. Personally, I recommend
people
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 to settle their new
life
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 abroad.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migrant
  • Brain drain
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Remittances
  • Expatriate
  • Diaspora
  • Transnational
  • Host country
  • Country of origin
  • Push and pull factors
  • Standard of living
  • Political asylum
  • Cross-cultural
  • Migrant workforce
  • Integration policy
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