Some people believe that when designing a building, the most important thing to be considered is the function rather than the outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
luxurious world, the
buildings
are designed in a way to
fulfill
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fulfil

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every architectural and practical
aspects
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aspect

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. It is argued that while planning the design, the functionality of a building should be prioritized. I partially agree
to
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with

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the statement and think that both aspects/factors are equally important.
This
essay will substantiate my view. Ensuring the proper function in a building will contribute towards comfort and security. People who are going
stay
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to stay

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in the building look for basic facilities.
For
example
, having easily accessible emergency exits and properly designed elevators provide extra safety and convenience respectively.
Moreover
, different
buildings
have different purposes and require to be layout according to the motive.
For
example
, A setup of
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital

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is entirely different
than
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from

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that
restaurants
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restaurant

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as it
include
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includes

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laboratories and other technicians are constructed in the hospitals rather than a restaurant because it serves the purpose of a hospital.
However
, outlooks of premises should be taken into consideration as it attracts people. Even though there are many other factors but the
first
thing that makes a visitor
to
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apply

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visit the building is its physical appearance. Tourists are fascinated
towards
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by

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the more beautiful
buildings
.
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example
,
Taj
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the Taj

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Mahal.
Besides
,
impressive
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an impressive

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look increases the commercial value of the property. It is evident that people are willing to pay more for aesthetic ambience.
For
example
, a recent survey has shown that structures with pleasing outer looks are sold at higher prices and holds more value in
merchandise
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the merchandise

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world. In conclusion, I believe that both features and
appealing
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the appealing

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/enduring appearance of a building should be considered equally when designing a building
provide
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provides

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us with consolation and security, to satisfy the needs at the same time aesthetic
buildings
ENHANCE
its
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their

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value in trading and tourism.
Submitted by kaur852manjot on

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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