Some people believe that when designing a building, the most important thing to be considered is the function rather than the outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
luxurious world, the
buildings
are designed in a way to
fulfill
Change the spelling
fulfil
show examples
every architectural and practical
aspects
Change to a singular noun
aspect
show examples
. It is argued that while planning the design, the functionality of a building should be prioritized. I partially agree
to
Change preposition
with
show examples
the statement and think that both aspects/factors are equally important.
This
essay will substantiate my view. Ensuring the proper function in a building will contribute towards comfort and security. People who are going
stay
Fix the infinitive
to stay
show examples
in the building look for basic facilities.
For
example
, having easily accessible emergency exits and properly designed elevators provide extra safety and convenience respectively.
Moreover
, different
buildings
have different purposes and require to be layout according to the motive.
For
example
, A setup of
hospital
Add an article
the hospital
a hospital
show examples
is entirely different
than
Change the preposition
from
show examples
that
restaurants
Fix the agreement mistake
restaurant
show examples
as it
include
Change the verb form
includes
show examples
laboratories and other technicians are constructed in the hospitals rather than a restaurant because it serves the purpose of a hospital.
However
, outlooks of premises should be taken into consideration as it attracts people. Even though there are many other factors but the
first
thing that makes a visitor
to
Change the verb form
apply
show examples
visit the building is its physical appearance. Tourists are fascinated
towards
Change preposition
by
show examples
the more beautiful
buildings
.
For
example
,
Taj
Correct article usage
the Taj
show examples
Mahal.
Besides
,
impressive
Correct article usage
an impressive
show examples
look increases the commercial value of the property. It is evident that people are willing to pay more for aesthetic ambience.
For
example
, a recent survey has shown that structures with pleasing outer looks are sold at higher prices and holds more value in
merchandise
Correct article usage
the merchandise
show examples
world. In conclusion, I believe that both features and
appealing
Correct article usage
the appealing
show examples
/enduring appearance of a building should be considered equally when designing a building
provide
Change the verb form
provides
show examples
us with consolation and security, to satisfy the needs at the same time aesthetic
buildings
ENHANCE
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
show examples
value in trading and tourism.
Submitted by on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: