Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Some believe that huge, amazing
buildings
are crucial for a residential area while others think that there should be more financial contribution Use synonyms
on
developing educational institutions and hospitals.Change preposition
to
Although
big, complex Linking Words
building
are essential for Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
people
to access more facilities comfortably in one place, I believe schools and hospitals should get more prioritised by giving more money for expanding healthcare Use synonyms
services
to save more lives and enhancing educational Use synonyms
services
to achieve children's future goals.
It's argued that construction of large Use synonyms
city
malls in a town area help Use synonyms
people
to purchase all necessary items in a place without travelling to other different locations or various small outlets. Use synonyms
In addition
to that, Linking Words
people
can save fuel costs Use synonyms
buying
their needs Change preposition
by buying
in
one roof. Change preposition
on
For example
, in India, Linking Words
as a result
of developing infrastructure of shopping Linking Words
complexs
in the capital Correct your spelling
complex
complexes
city
, growing number of Use synonyms
people
go shopping there, compared to before the era of old shopping Use synonyms
buildings
with lack of parking space Use synonyms
were
in the same location . In my opinion, hospitals and schools facilities should be enhanced to make Change the verb form
was
people
healthy by contributing more finance despite Use synonyms
of
the construction of large Remove the preposition
apply
buildings
.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Linking Words
people
believe that medical Use synonyms
services
and educational Use synonyms
services
must get more priority than the Use synonyms
constructing
of other complex Replace the word
construction
city
centres. Use synonyms
This
is becauseLinking Words
,
both advanced Remove the comma
apply
heathcare
Correct your spelling
healthcare
services
and free education are important Use synonyms
people
to become Use synonyms
healthy
and lawful Add an article
a healthy
the healthy
person
in society. Fix the agreement mistake
people
For example
, in Bangladesh,Linking Words
lot
of Correct article usage
a lot
people
died in Covid 19 Use synonyms
as a result
of Linking Words
availability
of fewer Intensive Care Unit beds and lack of medical staff. So I believe that government should establish a comfortable state of medical Add an article
the availability
services
and Use synonyms
high
level of education in order to enhance individuals healthy life and career opportunities.
In conclusion, whereas, the development of Correct article usage
a high
structure
of the Add an article
the structure
buildings
Use synonyms
are
essential in a residential Change the verb form
is
city
, I believe thatUse synonyms
,
more economic should be opened for the improvements of Healthcare Remove the comma
apply
services
and schools ensuring reduction of poor health status and Use synonyms
increasement
of territory level education.Correct your spelling
increment
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite