Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Some believe that huge, amazing
buildings
are crucial for a residential area while others think that there should be more financial contribution on
developing educational institutions and hospitals.Change preposition
to
Although
big, complex building
are essential for Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
people
to access more facilities comfortably in one place, I believe schools and hospitals should get more prioritised by giving more money for expanding healthcare services
to save more lives and enhancing educational services
to achieve children's future goals.
It's argued that construction of large city
malls in a town area help people
to purchase all necessary items in a place without travelling to other different locations or various small outlets. In addition
to that, people
can save fuel costs buying
their needs Change preposition
by buying
in
one roof. Change preposition
on
For example
, in India, as a result
of developing infrastructure of shopping complexs
in the capital Correct your spelling
complex
complexes
city
, growing number of people
go shopping there, compared to before the era of old shopping buildings
with lack of parking space were
in the same location . In my opinion, hospitals and schools facilities should be enhanced to make Change the verb form
was
people
healthy by contributing more finance despite of
the construction of large Remove the preposition
apply
buildings
.
On the other hand
, people
believe that medical services
and educational services
must get more priority than the constructing
of other complex Replace the word
construction
city
centres. This
is because,
both advanced Remove the comma
apply
heathcare
Correct your spelling
healthcare
services
and free education are important people
to become healthy
and lawful Add an article
a healthy
the healthy
person
in society. Fix the agreement mistake
people
For example
, in Bangladesh,lot
of Correct article usage
a lot
people
died in Covid 19 as a result
of availability
of fewer Intensive Care Unit beds and lack of medical staff. So I believe that government should establish a comfortable state of medical Add an article
the availability
services
and high
level of education in order to enhance individuals healthy life and career opportunities.
In conclusion, whereas, the development of Correct article usage
a high
structure
of the Add an article
the structure
buildings
are
essential in a residential Change the verb form
is
city
, I believe that,
more economic should be opened for the improvements of Healthcare Remove the comma
apply
services
and schools ensuring reduction of poor health status and increasement
of territory level education.Correct your spelling
increment
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite