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Some feel that countries should produce most of the food that is eaten in their country and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#feel #countries #food #country #import
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Someone argues that
countries
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 should produce the
food
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 their citizens consume, and minimize the import from other
countries
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. I understand that people may have concerns about importing
food
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 making their country relying on other
countries
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 on
food
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 industry which is a critical industry, but in
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 a peaceful world, and goods importing and exporting is so common nowadays, I don't agree with
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 opinion with the following reasons.
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 of all, not every country can produce enough
food
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 for itself, especially some small
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 which don't have enough fertilized land. The cost of cultivating
food
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 is much higher than importing
food
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 from other
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.
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, Korea is a population-dense country, and it imports a lot of vegetables, pork, fruit from China, because China can provide a variety of
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 at a low price and it is close to Korea, it is a wise choice to do the deal.
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, some
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 is only available from certain
countries
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, and they are very welcomed across the whole world, importing that
food
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 could provide more choice for people. Tropical fruits,
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, are very tasty
food
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, but they can only be produced in
countries
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 in tropical regions like Thailand. It is almost impossible for
countries
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 like Japan to plant those fruits, and the most reasonable way to have the Japanese enjoy them is to import them from other
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. To conclude, I believe that if other
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 can provide some
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 at lower cost, or some
food
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 welcomed by people but not available on the domestic farm, it is totally fine to import them.
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