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The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. School should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subject such as information technology. To what extent do you agree.

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There is no doubt about the role IT plays in our lives today. With the advancement of technology and the internet, some people argue that children must be prepared for
this
 new world, which means that subjects like art and
music
 must be eradicated from the curriculum.
On the other hand
, many people believe that these courses should remain. I partially disagree with the notion, that art and
music
 must be removed from the curriculum because
although
 their development in IT is important, the benefits of the
arts
 and
music
 cannot be ignored. In
this
 essay, we shall discuss both sides of
this
 argument.
First
 of all,
arts
 and
music
 are soothing for the mind and the soul and are a form of entertainment for many.
In addition
 to
this
, if a child has an aptitude in these fields, he should be allowed to pursue it. The main purpose of a school is to provide many avenues from which the kids can choose which stream they wish to follow.
Although
arts
 and
music
 may not give the same financial stability as a job in IT, they are valid jobs streams and should not be ignored.
On the other hand
, with the advancement of IT, getting skilled in
this
 area has no limits. The benefits of
this
 sector are that it is financially stable, and as it is an ever-evolving sector, it is boundless so an individual can merge one area of work with another. IT has made the world a global village of communication with the use of various platforms
such
 as Youtube and Facebook, but to name a few. In conclusion, I feel schools should not remove the
arts
 and
music
 from their curriculum because every child has the right to follow their interests but we cannot
also
 deny the importance of IT in today's world, and to completely turn your back on it would be a foolish mistake with devastating consequences.
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