Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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educational institutions nowadays. The main reason behind
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and solutions regarding bullying.
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themselves as
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have harsh childhood.
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by others
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depression or obesity and
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tend to attempt suicide.
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were registered because of bullying. To control
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, the government should launch
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campaign
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social media and in school.
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, the school authorities need to close observation on students activities.
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but not the list, the start should start
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concealing program which helps young people
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is zero due to free mental health services. To conclude,
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spread like a disease and juveniles are effect most. Only
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parenting and with the help of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bullying
  • Harassment
  • Intimidation
  • Diversity
  • Adolescent
  • Mimic
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Cyberbullying
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Awareness
  • Conflict resolution
  • Peer mediation
  • Consequences
  • Respect
  • Kindness
  • Open communication
  • Vulnerable
  • Buddy system
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