Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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educational institutions nowadays. The main reason behind
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and solutions regarding bullying.
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predominate
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reason is that, family issues. We often see that
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adolescents follow their
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. When they saw , their parents quarrelled like cats and dogs, and abused each other and that have
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impact on children thinking process. They start to think doing oppress is
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way to control or win over other people as well as they thought
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themselves as
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people
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have harsh childhood.
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by others
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leads them toward
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depression or obesity and
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American , 40%
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suicide
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were registered because of bullying. To control
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, the government should launch
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campaign
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social media and in school.
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, the school authorities need to close observation on students activities.
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concealing program which helps young people
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recover
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this
mental
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the rate
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is zero due to free mental health services. To conclude,
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spread like a disease and juveniles are effect most. Only
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parenting and with the help of
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this
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bullying
  • Harassment
  • Intimidation
  • Diversity
  • Adolescent
  • Mimic
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Cyberbullying
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Awareness
  • Conflict resolution
  • Peer mediation
  • Consequences
  • Respect
  • Kindness
  • Open communication
  • Vulnerable
  • Buddy system
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