Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development,however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

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argue that improving the level of
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depending on the
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financial
revolution , while others say if that happening ,
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the changes in countrys` economic help humen to be widely interactive with
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surrounding
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from their economic improvement to boost peoples`
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believe
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of wave development outweigh the drawbacks.
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, economic enhance is intensively
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helpful
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a citizen
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citizen
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to become closer and have strong
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amongst
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. You know that
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natians
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a high
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across known by everyone ,so when they get in
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terrible
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, what occurs in
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improvement reflects on peoples
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. persons` situation can change 90% if
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alter to be more modern and attractive. We can see that drivers
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to
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entertain
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their
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job
because of the decoration of the
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track
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enjoyable
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, what happen in
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Europe
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year when they opened the new roads for the workers
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enhance
them to attend in time and have a good mood out of the traffic jams
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sequences make them do much more better in their jobs. In conclusion,
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thinkings
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different
some of them encourage industrial
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improvement
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drawback
drawbacks
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in less social interaction. I
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truly
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disagree
with that statement. With technologies
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we reach almost
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every
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know
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now
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each other well by using phone or having
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discussion.
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,
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countries could help
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to find
less
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difficulties in their
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. The benefits of improving economics
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outweight
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outweigh
outweighed
the negatives.
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