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Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development,however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Most of the countries
people
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’s quality of life
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 on those nations financial progress. While, some individuals believe that, due to the growth of providence society lose
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moral values and
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 increases discrimination. In , the forthcoming essay, I will explain some positive and negative aspects and
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 give my own point of view.
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a
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human life. The
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mot
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 predominant reason is that, boosting up providence assists to come out from
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 cycle. Because of
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 can earn
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 amount of money unlike
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 past as well as they lead a quality full life with
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 of improvements.
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 decades ago, Bangladesh
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as
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poor
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 country, in
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 time, Bangladesh is now
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 nation
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 country shows steady improvement in
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.
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 , the unemployment rate is going low and
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 the liquidity of money on
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 hand
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 rise.
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 have two sides. Those
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 who argued with
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 notion,
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, in the developed countries the gap between poor and rich is going wide. For that reason, those
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 who belong to
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 community,
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are becoming self-
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 and do not feel the pain of lower folks.
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 economy forum run a survey and reported that
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 nowadays
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 have
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 social values and moralities because
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,they hold the power of money. To conclude, in my opinion, financial boost is important for
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 being it is improving our situation and
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 provide lots of services. And I
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 system can solve those problems .
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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