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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
The majority problem of dwell in
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oversea
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 where must interact with a foreigner is a language barrier.
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. In my perspective, I totally agree
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communication with a foreign language and existence
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abroad.
To begin
 with, most
people
 are encountering in speaking with a native speaker.
Similarly
, when
people
 do not understand, so they cannot dispute with
stranger
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 persons clearly and ambiguous.
For example
, most citizens in Germany speaks the traditional words, so tourists who would like to go there should communicate a little in their speech as well as we will conceive
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 to prevent misunderstanding during travelling.
Therefore
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 sounds and languages have disadvantages in receiving and sending the words from one to another one including may incur a major issue with different countries.
Furthermore
, someone who away from
homeland
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 is confronting
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 various
of
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lifestyle
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. Since there
are
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culture
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 diversity in
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 due to come from a different area
such
 as standard living, religions and traditions.
For instance
, in England,
people
 have a
favorite
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 beverage
that is
 tea and they have a culture in drinking tea with dessert while
Thai’s
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 population
favor
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coffee more than tea because they believe that it can urge their body in working all day.
Hence
,
people
 who move to a foreign country must adapt to a new environment and should have
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 institute in motivation them to occupy there. In conclusion, inhabit in a foreign nation leads to change massively in inhabitants to struggle with
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situation
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. In my opinion,
this
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 year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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