Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Lately, the importance of maintaining the wildlife
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is highly discussed by biologists and people from a variety of science
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the attention of government and other private initiatives to human care needs. In my point of view, applying investments on preserving wild animals’ life is so beneficial as applying the investment for
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of human population problems.
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, I believe the importance of maintaining the wildlife and their environment is essential to decrease the impact of human
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on Earth ecosystem, not only because of the animals
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a wide extent. If a predator is not available
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one specific environment, the Ecosystem will be impacted by the increase of animals that would feed the predator that does not exist anymore.
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impact on agriculture.
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loss of production and
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population.
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preserving wild animals’ life is so important as taking care of human lives, it can be understood as an investment for current and future economics and
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