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"Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted on the media." Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that detailed information
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 crimes committed should not expose to the public through social media. Personally, I completely disagree
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that
crimial
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criminal
 description should be restricted. On one hand, enough publicity of criminal cases could enhance the precautionary awareness of the public. Being
familar
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familiar
 with the process
how
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of how
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 the crime was committed and what was the intention and motivation of the criminal, people could take precautionary actions and make
fully
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 preparation to prevent
this
 kind of
crimes
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crime
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 from happening again.
For example
, when thieves were caught and their
behavior
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 was completely exposed to the public,
then
 people could know thieves' ways of stealing belongings or breaking into private properties which could largely decrease the criminal rate of
same
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 kind.
On the other hand
,
fully
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 exposure
of
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to
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 criminal cases could be a wake-up call for those potential
criminals
. A large number of
criminals
 don't have much
legistic
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logistic
linguistic
legalistic
 knowledge, and the severe punishment posed on
criminals
 and confessions of
criminals
 after being put into jail for years could largely hinder the intention of those future prisoners to commit crimes.
For example
, if a thief saw that another thief was sentenced to be in prison for 5 years for stealing 200
dollors
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dollars
, he will compare the drawbacks and benefits and possibly give up stealing things. In conclusion, exposure of detailed criminal
description
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descriptions
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 is necessary to the public and it could play a key role in decreasing the
criminal
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crime
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 rate.
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