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There are different methods businesses use to increase their sales. What are the different ways companies use to increase sales? Which one is the most effective?

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Business owners increase their funding by using different techniques.Many institutions put a plenty amount of money on advertisement and even make
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a discount
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discount
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discounts
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 for some
products
 to attract the consumer. The
products
 with low cost
shows
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 that
this
 method is the most appropriate way to
rise
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raise
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 the salary. Nowadays, the directions for business is using pictures and
slogns
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slogans
 in noticeboard to improve their
icome
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income
.
This
 method
inforce
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enforce
 many people to buy their
products
 and
showthat
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show that
 people become popular for
this
 goods even they do not need it.
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A good
 example of
this
 is
my self
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myself
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, one day I wonder when I become attractive when I saw an advertisement on the internet about perfume
that is
high quality
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products
 appears in a
beautifull
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beautiful
beautifully
 shape which
encourage
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 me to have like it even though I
dont
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don't
 want to use it soon.
However
, Modern stores make
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discount
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discounts
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 for customers
in
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 many different
occusions
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occasions
 .
Such
this
increse
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increase
 the
purches
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purchases
 because of the
highly
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 consumer demands .
For example
, Louris make
discount
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 for
middle class
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middle-class
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 people , so they get enforced through buying new perfume regardless of the big quantities they offer it finished in 5 hours only. In conclusion, Owners have a clever mindset to increase their salary by having peoples`
attentions
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attention
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`. They promote their sales through advertising
in
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 social media.
Also
,
discount
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discounts
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 play a very
significent
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significant
 role in the promotion of business.
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