Nowadays, it is not only large companies that are able to make films as digital technology enables anyone to produce films. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Recent digital technology allows not only professional
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film-makers
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film makers
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filmmakers
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, but
also
amateurs in the field to produce
films
with less effort. In my point of view,
this
is a beneficial progression for the
film
industry. In the following paragraphs,
reasons
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why I take
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this
standpoint will be stated in
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.
To begin
with, with the advancement of personal electronic devices,
such
as smartphones and computers, the process of making
films
is now plausible and reasonably simple.
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film
-making to become a hobby for many
people
and
also
allows low budget
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film makers
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filmmakers
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to do their jobs without struggling with financial aids. As more
people
started to be involved, more
films
are being created which is beneficial as
this
allows more creative
ideas
to be
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to the public. The lack of diversity has always been a problem in the
film
industry as huge companies tend to stick with their original style of
film
and new
ideas
are not excepted as they might destroy the companies' identity and uniqueness. Unlike these
film
companies, individuals are more flexible with their style and detail preferences which allows them to produce new and fresh
ideas
. Thanks to
the
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modern technology, more individuals are making their own
films
and publish them through social media platforms without having to spend too much money on getting their works to stream on the mainstream.
In addition
, allowing more
people
to access the tools to make
film
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films
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contribute deeper understanding
in
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certain topics.
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, when a social problem arises in a society, in the present,
people
can express their thoughts and provide information to others using social media platforms
which
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are accessible for most
of
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the
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people
. Documentaries can be created by not only the
professional
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professionals
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in making
films
,
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but
also
those who are well familiar with the topic which will increase the quality of the content and provide better context for the viewers. To
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, not limiting
film
-making to
only
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large
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a large
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company
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companies
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is very beneficial as the more
people
involve
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, the more
ideas
are created. The industry should embrace the
divesity
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diversity
and creativity of the
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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