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Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is the biggest source of pollution and waste others think that industries are the ones causing pollution.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Pollution is one of the factors that affecting our generation nowadays,
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, some people
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 that it
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is caused
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 by the modernized way of living
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 as technologies like automobiles.
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 what extent it is true? In
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 essay, I will discuss why it is debatable to
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society and why I am agreeing
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 issue.
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transportation is very important in our daily living. It is helping us, in a way that it is accessible to the public to go
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different
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destination
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 in
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 period of time. Examples are trains, planes, boats and cars. Every
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,
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 are witnessed how fast these inventions are upgrading, they made
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 convenient, stylish, and modern. Though the prices
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 companies are doubling their production.
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, some individuals are concern
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 how it affects the environment, chemicals and other harmful products are
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 to build and maintain the life of a car. It needs fuel or gasoline to make it work,
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 produces smoke which causes pollution. Because of these transportations,
environment
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the environment
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 is already
indangered
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endangered
, just by observing it, there are more buildings, infrastructures and high way created to use
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this technologies
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this technology
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 than green nature. In conclusion,
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 generation offering us the modern and upgraded kind of environment, where we can access and afford these things.
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, the negative
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 of it
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 compromising our surroundings by destroying and polluting
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. In the near future, it is possible that
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next
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 generation,
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cannot experience anymore the natural and fresh air. So we need to consider our children's future by preserving and cleaning our surroundings.
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