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Some people think exposure to modern technology at an earlier age is good for children, while others claim that it is harmful to their development. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #exposure #technology #age #children #development
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 sticking to their personal electronic gadgets.In
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 we can prove that age is just a number.Right from the kids to old every individual is so immersed in the virtual world.In
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 we will discuss, how the disadvantages of exposure to the latest
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 at a tender age
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the advantages. The current
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 has the immense power of attracting and grabbing
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's attention in no time.An individual's brain starts developing at
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 young age.They should spend
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 time
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playing with other kids physically.
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 helps them to stay fit.
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 develops their mental strength.
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,in every household we find parents giving
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 mobile phones to play virtual games rather than encouraging them to play real games.
Children
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 ,who are always curious and does everything they find fascinating, never think about the consequences of their doings.Introducing them
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 the
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 may result in accidents.
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 can find
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at least
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 way from the new automation that harms
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mankind.
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 we have come across
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 where
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 said to switch on the washing machine but the child ,in an attempt to switch it on ,got stuck in the machine.It
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 the family
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life
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.
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technology
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 has got some help
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the
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humans.
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,during the pandemic
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 are able to continue their education with the help of
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computers. To conclude,
children
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 must not be exposed to too much
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 .Parents must keep an eye scrutinising what the kid is doing.
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