the birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years. By 2030 it is estimated that over one third of the population in most developed countries will be aged 65 and over. What effects will these predictions have on developed countries if they prove true? what can be done now to deal with this situation?

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of a population is the average number of children that would be born to a woman over her lifetime if she were to experience the exact current
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and she were to survive from birth through the end of her reproductive
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. It is obtained by summing the single year
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for a given time point. Perhaps more relevant to the current debate is the replacement
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which is the total
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in which women would have only enough children to replace themselves and their partners. Effectively it is the total
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at which newborn girls would have an average of exactly 1 daughter over their lifetimes. By
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replacement is only considered to have occurred when the offspring reach 15 years of age. The replacement
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is roughly 2.1 live births per woman for most industrialised countries. Due to increased mortality
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, the approximate average for developing regions of the world is 2.3. At
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, population growth through reproduction will be approximately 0
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be affected by male-female ratios and mortality
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. There is an urgent need to initiate strategies at
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to prevent infertility and protect human
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. The government should prioritise the provision of safe, mild and cost-effective assisted reproduction treatments with single embryo transfer so that more treatment cycles could be offered within the available health budget.
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treatment” as a government policy and it should be dealt with across many departments as indicated in Figure 1 to boost the birth
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