A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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original wellspring of revenue. Badly,
tourism
might
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a fount of
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into any
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some difficulty.
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the one hand,
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many
countries
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the world true out to attract people of different places to meet their land. It is one of
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of their labour market. How many tourists are coming to their country as much as they are earning
money
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Furthermore
, how we know
tourism
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an industry because of
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that it
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possible.
For example
, TURKEY is one of the tourist
countries
that major part of their economic supply by
tourism
. Eventually, the lands which accept more
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into
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they can attract more
money
to their economic system due to
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money
by visitors.
On the other hand
, tourists have some
problems
that bring with
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, they have
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culture
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that may be not parallel to
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of
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Secondly
, governments must take measures to control
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of visitors. And
finally
, they are
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of crowd every place
such
as; public transportation, malls, bakeries which the comfort of locals is disturbed.
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, employees every morning get public transport to get to their job that due to traffic jam on the street or traffic in subway they could late to
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Thus
, visitors are cause
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as a result
for governments,
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and
also
discipline. In conclusion,
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come to the
countries
; they have some advantages like bring
money
which is injected into the
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of their country.
However
, they have
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a difficulty
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that is
transferred to structure of their country and who live in there. In my opinion,
tourism
has many
problems
that require to manage before tourists allowing to come for relaxing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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