3. Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

Climate
change
is already a reality around the
world
and the only way to take care is at a global level. I wholeheartedly agree because we live in the same
world
and all the impact is global, and in
this
,
an
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essay I will explain my reasons why I agree with
this
statement. The
first
reason is that the
world
is totally connected. What we do in the Asian ocen will impact the pacific
ocean
.
For example
, if some plastic is
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disposal of in the
ocean
, it will contaminate all the
ocean
and not only the region which is wasted.
Therefore
, the plastic in the
ocean
has a global impact.
Secondly
, the air pollution in some developing
countries
still using fossil fuel as the primary resource of energy.
This
pollution is contributing to elevating the average temperature around the
world
and its consequences are impacting every nation.
For example
, Brazil is still using fossil fuel to drive and all the logistics system is based on vehicle transportation that uses
this
energy.
Therefore
, they must
change
their source of energy' transportation. Another reason why
this
is a global issue is that the developing
countries
, which must need more improvements, do not have enough financial efforts to make
this
happen. Even though they are trying to
change
their habits to follow the environmental concerns, they cannot meet
this
deadline since they are poor.
For example
, these poor
countries
do not have money enough to make their people survive from starvation, how they can be aware of climate
change
?
Therefore
, they need help from rich
countries
to
change
this
scenario. To conclude, many places around the
world
are fighting against climate
change
and
this
is a global issue. I believe that every nation must do something even small because every
change
will improve the whole
world
.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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