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Nowadays it is common for people to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

#people #children #thirties #trend #benefit #society
In my opinion, I will agree that people in their twenties might not have
sufficent
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 work experience and financially
stablity
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stability
stable
 due to their lack of exposure towards challenging reality in
outside
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 world.
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, due to their younger
age
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 they are more
commited
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committed
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 other areas
such
 as gaming and studying which makes them less
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committed
 to have
marriage
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 and have children.
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, without the stability of flowing
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 it might affect them emotionally and mentally.
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, they have fewer experiences on knowledge in raising children than those parents who are in their mid-thirties in terms of superiority. For people in their thirties, might possess financially stability due to their exposure in age and experience,
therefore
 they have much more capital wealth that motivates their mental state and stability in marriage and managing their children.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic stability
  • financial security
  • mature decision making
  • life goals
  • child welfare
  • emotionally equipped
  • population growth control
  • resource management
  • environmental sustainability
  • changing social norms
  • traditional timelines
  • personal freedom
  • social diversity
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