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When cars and cyclists use the same roads, there are often problems. Why is this the case? What are the solutions?

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At the start of the year, there is an abnormally high rate of
cyclists
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 during the weekend based on the trending charts in Singapore.
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, it is confirmed in the news that
cyclists
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 are obstructing the roads in Singapore due to the increasingly large participation of events over the months.
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, it is a fact that
cyclists
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 on
road
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 generally might cause more problems to car
users
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 that widely depends on the number of
users
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 in bicycle models and lack of awareness in
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 pavement.
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, certain bicycle models
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 as mountain bicycles are not optimised for roads
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 as in rainy weather because their tyre is not robust and will be costly for maintenance and repair over the months.
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, a large number of
cyclists
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 on the
road
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 pavement are focusing their attention on what lies ahead of them and taking instructions from their front-line leaders, so it will be difficult for them to navigate their surroundings with mindfulness. As for the solutions, I will recommend a smaller group of
cyclists
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 with a mirror attached to the side and back of their bicycle and a model
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 optimised for roadway
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 as pavement bicycles tyre
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 durable for rainy and hot seasons. Another problem could be that
cyclists
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 are lacking hand gestures to indicate car
drivers
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 on the lane when they are making a turn on congested roads.
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,
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 could mislead
drivers
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 and cause more accidents in the future. As for car
users
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 on the
road
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, they are less likely to cause major problems unless there is an indication of mental disability
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 as obsessive-compulsive disorder or anxiety issues for
drivers
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 themselves. In conclusion,
cyclists
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 must have the right equipment, models and knowledge on the
road
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 to ensure zero accidents. As for the
drivers
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, ensure that they are in the right condition of mental state for them to be driving safely on the
road
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 without endangering the lives of other
users
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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