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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
In
this
 twenty-
first
 modern world, we have witnessed plenty of
options
 regarding our preferences. I mostly agree with the notion that at present, there are a plethora of choices surrounding us.
However
, the limitation of
selection
 should not be left in limbo.
First
 of all, we have abundant picking
options
 because of the unprecedented progress and development in the field of science and technology. For the purchase of cars
for
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 example, there are a hefty number of companies operating in various countries in the world, meaning huge quantities of cars with a variety of styles and colours are available for customers.
Moreover
, the online platform buttresses the availability of all kinds of products all over the world. As a consequence, people have multiple
pick
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picks
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 up
options
 to purchase or get a particular product.
Secondly
,
Universal
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 advertisement policy has been supported to get different items in a certain time. The reason behind
this
 scenario is not only the flexibility of the marketing system but
also
 the concept of the global village. Youtube in fact has been providing a variety of ads apart from its main contents.
Additionally
,
the
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growing self-awareness
also
 plays a crucial role in its divergence
selection
. Due to the ubiquitous nature of advertisement and self-awareness, the
selection
 criteria is expanding.
Nonetheless
, there are some drawbacks of
this
 concept because unpopular and unconventional products are less available. Traditional foods and clothes
for instance
, with a view to industrialization, are getting less preference by
its
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their
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 manufacturers as well as its buyers.
Furthermore
, if there are a lot of items to buy,
then
 it definitely raises hesitation and confusion.
Therefore
, multiple
options
 of
selection
 are not an absolute picture. In conclusion, though there are tiny flaws in
this
 prompt, nobody can refute the view of having prolific
options
 to choose from.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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