The detailed description about crime will affect people and cause many social problems. Some people say that the media should be strictly controlled. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over whether it is necessary to put harsh regulations on social networks
due to
the negative effects of illicit acts.
While
some assert that it is better for each individual to gain wide access to the Internet, I would contend that the
media
should be wise in selecting what should be published to the public. Without a shadow of a doubt, news channel management plays a paramount role in social civilization. To be more precise, children and adolescents are immature, naïve, and have a weak awareness of how
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frequently subject to toxic virtual content which leaves a deep impression on their minds and
then
they will mimic those criminal actions.
For instance
, in Vietnam, Ngo Ba Kha is one who used to be considered the Internet viral phenomenon having
such
an immense impact on youngsters who range from 13-16 years old because of his million-view videos.
However
, he abused acts of violence like burning motorbikes and encouraged people to be involved in a fight.
Hence
, negative content on the Internet should be censored or hidden from the social newsfeed.
While
the importance of rigid control on the
media
is widely acknowledged, some people assert that we have a right to know the detailed report about crimes. To be specific, The
media
has an obligation to show a clear picture of crime and the right if any murder or robbery happens in someone’s house, which is shown in detail on television, citizens who are in the vicinity of that house can raise their alertness to the highest and avoid suffering from unfortunate things.
Therefore
, a sufficient illustration of crime should be gained access by the inhabitants.
To sum up
,
although
it is the duty of social
media
to keep us well informed, the details of the crime are better to be limited
due to
its detrimental influence on the young.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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