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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world ?

#development #tourism #english #language #world #people
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As
per
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the per
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 capita income of the
world
 has been at its highest in the
last
 decade, more
travelers
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 are visiting various tourist destinations than ever before. With
this
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 there is a growing perception that eventually
English
 will become the only spoken
language
 globally.
Although
 it is true that when
English
 becomes a common
language
 we will have a much closer and understanding international community, it would certainly be at the expense of smaller indigenous people and their languages. Even though
English
 is currently used for communication in most countries, there is still a wide disparity between the number of people who speak it and those who don’t. People native to South America or China still like to communicate in their local languages and possess little or no knowledge of
English
. If
English
 becomes the primary
language
 all over the globe,
then
 it would certainly reduce the communication barrier between nations. With better understanding, more and more visitors would be willing to visit these countries and
hence
 it can prove to be a boon for the local tourism industry.
For example
, countries like China and South Korea have been seeing
significant
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 fall in their annual tourism with tourists complaining that most common services like hotels, road signs and maps are not bilingual.
On the other hand
, electing
English
 as the only spoken
language
 around the
world
 would certainly prove a threat to small cultures around the
world
, especially indigenous communities. Already one can witness that there are many tribes
which
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 are disconnected from the
world
, and if
English
 were to become the main
language
, it would push those groups
further
 away. If there is no support provided to market their local
language
 and culture, their heritage would fade away by
lack
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 of visits from tourists.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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