It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they do not enjoy. Do you agree or disagree?
There are two views about
God gif
talents. Correct your spelling
God's
While
one group of people believe that certain features such
as music and sport in individual
are with people from born, another group are against Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
from
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apply
this
opinion, they agree that successful persons work as hard as they can to achieve whatever they want. I completely agree with second
view.
On the one hand, It is Change the article
the second
common
believed that some of our features are gifts which come from Change the adjective
commonly
the
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apply
God
, for instance
, having great
voice for singing or making fantastic Add an article
a great
painting
at Fix the agreement mistake
paintings
young
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a young
ages
. If anyone finds their own strongest and Fix the agreement mistake
age
try
to discover the best path in it, they will be successful. In the past, families forced their children to continue their ancient Correct subject-verb agreement
tries
job
, they Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
faught
their Correct your spelling
fought
can
expand that business because of Verb problem
apply
inherit
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inherited
characters
.
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characteristics
On the other hand
, there are many reasons that
why there is not any strong Correct word choice
apply
relation
between achievement and talent. Replace the word
relationship
First,
it is obvious that some talents are
with me Wrong verb form
have been
from
childhood but there is only Change preposition
since
a
proof. It seems to me that, if I was into a specific activity like playing exercise, I would be Correct article usage
apply
to
the way to catch my dream. In Change preposition
on
this
way, I can work as hard as I can and take part in sport
clubs. Change the noun form
sports
Second,
one's personality is different from others, thus
, realising our weaknesses and powers are
highly beneficial for guiding us in a good way. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
In
my Change preposition
From
stand point
, Correct your spelling
standpoint
god
gift talent
only is Change preposition
of talent
a
proof, for sure we have some features when we Change the article
apply
were
born, Wrong verb form
are
however
, working and practicing
Change the spelling
practising
are
far more important than Change the verb form
is
personally
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personal
talens
.
Correct your spelling
talents
To conclude
, There are couple
of concepts about Add an article
a couple
human's
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human
powerties
. Correct your spelling
power ties
poverties
Although
some of them are from the
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apply
God
, it seems to me that our desire to unlock our dream is more significant that
whatever we have Correct word choice
than
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apply
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a young
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