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In some countries young people are not only richer, but also safer and healthier than ever before. However, they are often less happy. What do you think are the reasons for this and what can be done to keep?

#countries #people
It is undeniable truth is that
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young
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 generation are playing a vital role for a nation economical enlargement. While , some individuals
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often argued that,
although
 they are living a standard life
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they are so dejected now. In, the forthcoming essay, I will explain some reasons and some solutions regarding
this
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To begin
 with, the predominant reason, why adolescents are becoming despondent, despite
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all modern facilities are available in their life because they give more value
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 their profession and materialistic things. For achieving their passion they leave their home and family.when they got everything in their life they started feel
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. For that reason, there
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 no one with whom, they can share their problems and pain.
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,
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 health
organisation
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 say, 50%
young
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 people are
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effected
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 by depression because they live alone.
Moreover
, they always think luxurious
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, cars, brought happiness but at the end of the
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 they miss
warmth
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 of love.
However
,
on the other hand
,
this
 problem going to big in present
time
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, in past people live with extended family but in the modern
time
 ,
thus
 to live with
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 family , youngsters did not open up. To solve
this
 problem, the government should launch
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 awareness campaign program in social media and in schools
usefulness
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 of family and friends.
Furthermore
, parents should spend quality
time
 with juveniles and
also
 try to help them to open up with family. To conclude, happiness
depend
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 on mental peace to find it ;we need to reduce dependence on things and
also
 have to spend
time
 with close people.
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