Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

Having a career or two
is totally depends
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on
person
to
person
.
However
, having a couple of income sources are always advantageous and one has to keep learning new skills to enhance it. A decade ago, people were generally would rely on a single job and
that
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time it was adequate to afford the entire family's
need
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. After
graduated
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in specific subjects, a
person
can
persue
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pursue
the same
field work
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fieldwork
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. They
havent
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haven't
have
ever thought about doing two jobs simultaneously. Due to the fact that it
wasnt
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wasn't
exposed digitally and people used to do only 9 to 5 work and neither
part time
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jobs were in trend. So it was
only
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choice
left
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to leave
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them with one career. While
on the other hand
, in
this
digital world
person
has so many options to earn money. Even though you did finance, you can work as
a
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digital marketing and have
second
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a second
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source of income. Provided that you need to have the knowledge for the same which you can easily get it through
online
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short course. In
this
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cut-throat
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cut throat
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cutthroat
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world, neither just a
fashoin
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fashion
, but it is mandatory to have at least more than one monthly
pay
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payment
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to cover basic needs,
kid's
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kids'
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education and leisure activities. The best thing is that even if you are at your 40 and need to earn extra money, you can turn your hobbies into
income
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an income
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sourse
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source
.
For instance
, a teacher is earning good but she wants extra money and baking cake is her
fortey
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forte
Fortey
. Since she was not able to open a shop, she just did marketing through social media
platform
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platforms
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and starts getting orders. She is now proudly earning more than enough
However
, she needs to get
license
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a license
the license
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to bake the cake which she did
onilne
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online
nine
onions
. So in conclusion, having several jobs for earning good is the best thing to do.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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