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Social media has replaced the traditional methods of communicating and people use more and more of social media to communicate and to follow news and events. Some people think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion with example.

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 are using social
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 all the time to be updated on what is happening around the world and to connect
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 ones rather than using the old ways of communication. In
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 I will discuss more the benefits than the drawbacks of social
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 as well as my opinion.
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 day and age it is because of the pandemic most
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 are isolated in their homes and with the help of social
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 their use it frequently in
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someone worldwide.
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,
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are using social
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 to get
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insights
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 their customer
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 through feedback and
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 for the advertisement of their products.
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, in
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 to be updated, most
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 are relying more on social
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 applications for
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current events and news because it is more accessible and easy.
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,
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 and New York Times applications you can only download through your phone and you can turn on the notifications so that you can follow the latest headlines.  
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, using frequently of social
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 is has negative impacts
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 to
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. We are using social
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 in
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 to know the news and events.
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, some applications are spreading fake reports and making stories in
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 to catch
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's attention.
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, we need to be sure that our sources of news are more reliable and trustworthy. To conclude,
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 essay has discussed the pros and cons and in my overall opinion, we cannot overestimate the importance of social
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 in our lives because it provides more valuable and advantageous in our daily living.
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