It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.). There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

Various species of
animals
are getting extinct, some are due to
natural
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course of
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environment
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. Whereas, some are due to the interference of human beings. To which, some people do opine that we should turn a blind eye towards
this
phenomenon. I certainly disagree
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this
statement and I would justify my statement in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, we as
human
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humans
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are completely responsible for
this
mess. Due to our selfishness, we have destroyed animal's natural
habitat
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habitats
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, and
this
is positively one of the
factor
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which is contributing to these fauna's depletion.
For instance
, deforestation for
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of buildings or towers.
Secondly
, human greed is
also
one of the
reason
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.
Plethora
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of
animals
are
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being killed in order to extract some or the other kind of resources, which in turn provide economical benefits.
For example
, poaching of elephant's trunk for ivory.
Thirdly
, It is all due to the interference of
human
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humans
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with the environment that climate has been changing and
in-turn
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in turn
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creating turmoil for these
animals
.
Such
as
,
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fire in
forest
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forests
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, landslides, extreme heat or pollution have contributed to adverse climate conditions.
Although
, there
are
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certain
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a certain
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phenomenon, to which no one
have
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any answers. To illustrate,
extinction
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of Dinosaurs or dodos took place due to the natural disaster and humans do not have
any
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active role
behind
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this
. Whereas,
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considering the
above given
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reasons, I do completely believe that we as
responsible
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citizen
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citizens
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of
this
nation could combat
this
scenario of extinction by protecting the endangered species,
this
can be done by building a natural habitat for these different or rare breeds or by enforcing
stringet
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stringent
laws against the businesses that harm
animals
for their benefits. To conclude, though everything would not be in our control
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sometimes there are certain measures that if taken or followed appropriately by humans can actually protect and preserve the declining animal kingdom.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • species extinction
  • biodiversity
  • conservation
  • ecosystems
  • environmental ethics
  • habitat destruction
  • anthropogenic impact
  • ecological balance
  • natural selection
  • wildlife preservation
  • genetic diversity
  • endangered species
  • biological heritage
  • sustainable practices
  • Anthropocene
  • cascade effects
  • intrinsic value
  • habitat conservation
  • extinction crisis
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