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friend of yours invited you to a home party he/she arranged. However, you have just missed this party. Now you want to apologise for not attending it. Write a letter to your friend to apologise. In your letter, • apologise to your friend • explain why you did not attend the party • say what you plan to do to make up for missing the party

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Hi Miss Zara, how are you? I want to apologize for not being able to attend your birthday. The reason I couldn’t come that day is that I had to travel to Bukhara to meet my father, who was returning from Russia. After he arrived, we had guests over. I’m really sorry that I couldn’t be there with you on
such
 a special day, but when we meet, I’ll give you the gift I bought just for you. I hope you’ll like it. I
also
 promise that we’ll have lunch together when you have time, and it’ll be my treat. I hope you understand. Goodbye, and have a wonderful day and
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task achievement
While your response covers all parts of the task, try to elaborate a bit more on each point. For instance, you could explain more about why meeting your father was crucial or suggest another activity to look forward to.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, consider dividing your explanation and apology into separate paragraphs for better readability. This makes it easier for the reader to follow your thoughts.
task achievement
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is highly suitable for this type of correspondence.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are polite and appropriate for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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