In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge.

A highly controversial topic today relates

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we should encourage

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kids

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that they will achieve anything if they work hard. Some believe

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is not a healthy message,

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others believe that it is. In

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give my own opinion on the matter. On

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there are people who argue the benefits of motivating kids considerably

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outweigh

its

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disadvantages

. The main reason for believing

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is that

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message will have become dangerous

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because it might

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is hard to go out from. Most

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adults

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these days have

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performance

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is because they tend to be more

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. It is

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possible to say that it might make kids

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more

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impulsive

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good illustration of

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is that they might become less rational and more

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. In investment, they said do not ever put your investment in

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egg.

On the other hand

, it is

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possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact that

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affirmation

to kids is

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extremely

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beneficial

. People often have

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opinion because

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might

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strengthen

young

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persona.

Moreover

,

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would boost thiers confidence and it will make them unstoppable when they face any struggles in life. A

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point is that it would create positive change in the community. In fact, there is a huge

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that the motivated kid might inspire others to be more motivated. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,

however

, I tend to believe that encouraging children is a good

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.

This

is because if no

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had been encouraged I do not believe that we will enter the technological revolution.