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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The transportation
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 is vital in every community which allows the public to move
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the
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different places,
thus
production
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the production
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 of
cars
are
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 increasing. What is the effect of
this
 in our society? In
this
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government
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the government
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 is addressing the issues that it may cause.
To begin
 with,
the
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transportation helps people to travel at ease in going to their destinations. Nowadays,
their
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 are many kinds to choose from, examples are, trains, boats, planes, buses and
cars
.
However
,
cars
 are in demand because it is convenient, accessible and comfortable which the public are availing even though it is expensive.
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,
new
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 generation brought updated automobiles every now and
then
 which individuals are hooked to buy it.
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, increasing the number of vehicles
in
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 the roads means increasing the effects on
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society. Some
community
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communities
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 raised the negative effects of overpopulated
cars
in
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 the roads which causes accidents, traffics and even pollution.
That is
 why
,
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 concerned citizens encouraging to use other means to travel to decrease these problems. Even the government made laws to solve these issues. In conclusion, I agree that using alternatives to resolve the
corcerns
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concerns
 can benefit us in the future.
Administration
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 should mandate and convince more
the
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society to follow in order to prevent
further
 damage that it may cause. It is
also
 our obligation how to help the government and the public.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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