Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is a common belief that public
health
would
be strengthen
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effectively by raising the
number
of
sport
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sports
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infrastructures.
However
, there is a more persuasive opinion that
this
is seemed
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as
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a part of building
a
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sustainable
health
,
then
, other approaches would be required. Analysis
both
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views would give a comprehensive opinion of the idea. On one side of the argument, due to the
increasing
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in
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number
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the number
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of
sport
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sports
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centers
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,
people
would obtain their goals which usually are keeping them in shape and better. The
customers
could refer to work-out schedules which are generated by their trainers.
Moreover
, those trainers are required to have degrees on
sport
sciences as well so that they can give their
customers
proper
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advice
advices
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.
For instance
, one of my friend who is a personal coach in a gym
center
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, she has a sporty body so she can attract more potential
customers
. Her
customers
also
give feedback on her courses, often positive ones.
Nevertheless
, it seems that despite the huge
quantites
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quantities
of
sport
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facilities, it just
have
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a minor effect on social
health
.
People
also
have to raise their
conciousness
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consciousness
about nutrition and
sport
science, which would not be so intensive.
Additionally
, most of them should be encouraged to take part in outdoor activities
besides
those are in
health
centers
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as these
people
are too lazy to
excersice
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exercise
or their awareness
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health
issues is not well-rounded. According to
a
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recent research, 60% of adolescents in America encountered diabetes due to the fast-food
overconsumtion
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overconsumption
,
then
, the research required a social effort on declining
this
number
by building sustainable practices and proper nutrition.
Besides
, they
also
stimulated those
people
at that age
joined
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the
health
community and
sport
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sports
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centers
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instead
of staying at their
home
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.
Summary
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, it is clear that increasing the
number
of
sport
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facilities play a role,
besides
other methods, in a general effort on raising public
health
.
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  • public health
  • chronic diseases
  • preventative care
  • obesity
  • physical activity
  • health initiatives
  • health education campaigns
  • social interaction
  • mental wellbeing
  • motivation
  • accessible venues
  • active lifestyle
  • quality healthcare
  • community hubs
  • multipronged approach
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