Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is a common belief that public

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effectively by raising the

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of

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sport

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infrastructures.

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, there is a more persuasive opinion that

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is seemed

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a part of building

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sustainable

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, other approaches would be required. Analysis

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views would give a comprehensive opinion of the idea. On one side of the argument, due to the

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in

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number

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of

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sport

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centers

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,

people

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would obtain their goals which usually are keeping them in shape and better. The

customers

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could refer to work-out schedules which are generated by their trainers.

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, those trainers are required to have degrees on

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sciences as well so that they can give their

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proper

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advice

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, one of my friend who is a personal coach in a gym

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, she has a sporty body so she can attract more potential

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. Her

customers

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also

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give feedback on her courses, often positive ones.

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, it seems that despite the huge

quantites

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quantities

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sport

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facilities, it just

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a minor effect on social

health

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also

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have to raise their

conciousness

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consciousness

about nutrition and

sport

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science, which would not be so intensive.

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, most of them should be encouraged to take part in outdoor activities

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those are in

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centers

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as these

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are too lazy to

excersice

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exercise

or their awareness

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health

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issues is not well-rounded. According to

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recent research, 60% of adolescents in America encountered diabetes due to the fast-food

overconsumtion

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overconsumption

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, the research required a social effort on declining

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number

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by building sustainable practices and proper nutrition.

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stimulated those

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at that age

joined

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the

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community and

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centers

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instead

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of staying at their

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, it is clear that increasing the

number

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of

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sport

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facilities play a role,

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other methods, in a general effort on raising public

health

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