Nowadays parents give more freedom to their children than in the past. is it a positive or negative development. Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

With
change
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the change
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in trends,
parents
these days are giving more liberty to their
children
than given in the past.
Although
some people say that giving more freedom shall negatively affect
children
, giving more freedom
have
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a positive impact on
the
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society and development of the
children
in becoming more responsible and successful adults. 
This
change in
secnario
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scenario
is helping
kids
in becoming more independent and do things by themself rather than depending on their
parents
to do chores for them. They are learning
life
skills
such
as cooking, cleaning, buying grocery etc. which will be helpful in
for
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their college and job
life
where they
they
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struggle to make a living for themselves. It is
pretinent
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pertinent
to mention that
gaurdians
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guardians
in japan give full autonomy to their youngsters and they do daily work like boarding metro to school, buying food items, cleaning their rooms and preparing breakfast. As
children
become more independent,
parents
will
also
have more time for themselves to invest in some productive work.
Children
are able to follow their passion rather than
becoming
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book worms. Many
parents
especially in countries like India and China impose strict control over
kids
and prefer they choose a career of engineering, medical science or become bankers which come with big bucks.
However
, many other career options
such
as musicians, actors, chefs, artists etc. have better
propects
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prospects
in
life
and they live
more
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happy
life
. By making youngsters do what they don't want in
life
leads them
in
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depression and ego depletion which affects their cognitive ability.  To conclude
this
syllogism,
parents
should give more freedom to their
kids
as times have changed and
kids
needd
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need
needed
to face the world at the end of the day by themselves alone. Since they will be making decisions for
themsleves
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themselves
and they shall
also
be
responsilble
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responsible
for them.
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