CHILDREN LEARN MORE BY OBSERVING THE BEHAVIOUR OF ADULTS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? GIVE YOUR OPINION WITH RELEVANT EXAMPLES

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observing and learning of what their
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are doing can go to negative or positive or the infant. they catch all the talks and observe. I will elaborate on my view in
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of people observe,
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responsibility to think what they are talking each other in front of the toddlers. it can be a learning for them or it can give
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effect
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the
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. because
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observe all the small activities and talks they keep
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in their mind.
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if the
parents
are fighting or arguing and saying anything abusing it can be a negative impact on the infant. ,
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kids
get into depression if there are fighting in front of them, and it can affect their growth. For ,instance there is a survey
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in one of the cities in India, from the oxford university professor
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have found that those
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are more in depression and feeling insecure and lonely. I strongly agree that infants are observing all the activities of pupils and they can learn and get
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from their surroundings. for ,instance in Canada mostly
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are teaching their
kids
and according to them
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understand their expressions and observe them well. In conclusion, a myriad of people
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that children are observing and behaving as per their
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and
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can affect them in negative or positive both the way. so
parents
should speak or do that
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activity activities
what they want their
kids
to learn .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Imitation
  • Observational learning
  • Role model
  • Social learning theory
  • Behavioral influence
  • Skill acquisition
  • Cognition
  • Socialization
  • Critical thinking
  • Direct instruction
  • Cultural transmission
  • Media influence
  • Norms and values
  • Cognitive development
  • Guidance
  • Active participation
  • Behavioural patterns
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