In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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a backbone of all the nation and

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believe

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should invest more funding to constructing

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railway line and bring the super fast

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develop

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and growth.

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