In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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transportation

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the good speed

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to the pupils for

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cities they can travel in superfast

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mumbai

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the

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as the

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a backbone of all the nation and

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believe

authority

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should invest more funding to constructing

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railway line and bring the super fast

train

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develop

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and growth.

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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Fully explain your ideas

What are the main reasons and solutions for re-offend?

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