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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.Do the advantages of this out weigh the disadvantage

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Many individual specialists feel that it is good for the young generation to start learning
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 at a lower level of education than secondary school.Learning a new
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 when young has some drawbacks like losing identity and lack of knowing vernacular.But again, I feel that learning a foreign
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 gives a great opportunity for
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 to learn different diversity of languages
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 expanding their way of thinking.
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, given the current world of diversity learning a new
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 gives the
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 the great opportunity in securing job opportunities in future from different countries across the world.
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, learning the Chinese
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 gives a good chance for
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 in future to work with ease with companies related to China.
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, learning a new
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 promote the modern way of technology improvement.
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, learning a new
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 for
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 will create a chance for
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 at risk of losing their identity
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 they are not able to associate with where they come from.
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, learning a new
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 will make
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 miss
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their
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 by imitating
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the foreign
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, a recent study shows that
children
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 who learn a foreign
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 while young have
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% chance of missing out on their mother tongue. In conclusion, learning
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 improves
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 knowledge and understanding which is relevant for the modern world.
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, parents should encourage
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 to speak their mother tongue too.
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