In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages?

It is commonly argued that staying in a foreign country
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you to speak another
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for significant social and practical issues. While it is highly beneficial for some reasons, I completely agree with
this
given statement. On the one hand, some
people
agree that the experience of living in another country which have another tunge is the greatest teacher for them because of some reasons.
Firstly
, while they miss their own country and their mother
language
, they will be improved other sides of themselves.
For example
, many graduated students and
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young
workers immigrate to overseas
countries
for unlocking their dreams and
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the
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better job prospects.
Secondly
, sometimes, foreign
countries
give
people
several advantages that new
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language
and its possible problems are disappeared.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that learning and speaking
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language
is tough and have
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enormous
problems. Having
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with
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alien
population is far more difficult than speaking to our relatives,
moreover
,
people
find it difficult to illustrate whenever they need in another
language
,
thus
the risk of
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misunderstanding
is high. If you were sick and you
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able to tell your problem to the doctor, it would be possible that the doctor use
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treatment and
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which lead
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serious
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.
Moreover
, I believe that in some areas humans who move from other
countries
have some negative feelings like depression and isolation when they can not hang out with new
people
. To conclude,
Although
living in other
countries
which population speak in another
language
has advantages, it seems to me that it is the main reason for some issues.
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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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