Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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with the opinion of
children
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should be able to
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their
phones
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while they are at
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during learning hours. There should be no world in which
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children
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under the age of 13 are allowed to
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mobile
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during a day of
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. Gen Z is a human generation defined by the fact that people born in
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generation are exposed to the internet and smart
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since they were born.
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,
children
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are now more addicted to their smart
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than ever before.
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constant stimulation of the brain is something the human brain is not evolved to process and balance out. Meaning, in most cases,
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, or portable smart
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are very harmful to the brain’s reward system, rendering the
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unable to be motivated to study
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or participate in physical activities. Having
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using their
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at
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is a disaster for education. Modern
smartphones
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with many functionalities and applications designed to capture the
users
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attention are direct competitions to the education happening in
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. Even if schools ban the
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of
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during class and only allow
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usage, the presence of the
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and the urge to
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it
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alone is enough to steer the attention of the students away from the lecture and
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them
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about what they would do in their app of choice in half an hour. Human’s attention and
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is not limitless, and having
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in schools’ perimeter is not ideal for preserving it for learning. The exception could be the
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of “dumb”
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for communicating with parents only. But no one in the right mind should regulate the
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of
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at schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Concentration
  • Emergency communication
  • Digital literacy
  • Educational resources
  • Social development
  • Self-regulation
  • Enforcement
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Technology access
  • Learning apps
  • Screen time
  • Peer interaction
  • School policy
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