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some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what extent do you agree

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Since the old days,
books
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 were the keepers of our history and the only source of knowledge and entertainment. Now in modern society
books
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 are being replaced by computers, mobile phones, television, gaming systems etcetera and
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 as an effort to be environmentally friendly. The production of
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 uses trees as paper and as
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 the world is trying to reduce cutting down using as many trees as possible for the environment. Schools are encouraging the use of technology
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 as laptops and tablets in the place of
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. In fact, if they use textbooks they are electronic copies read from the tablets and computers accessed from the internet.
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, students complain about their backpacks being very heavy and how troublesome it is needing to carry a lot of textbooks for their many class subjects.
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, studies have shown that the children's bones that have yet to reach maturity
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 as the spine have the possibility of developing kyphotic postures and deformity due to heavy backpacks. As early prevention schools lessen the usage of physical textbooks unless necessary. Rare is the youth of the modern world seeking
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 to past time and leisure. Many turn to their gaming systems
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 as the PlayStation, Xbox and computers. The youth are exposed to
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 things since they are young and things
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 as storybooks and novels are not as popular to them. If they seek answers or knowledge they can always turn to google and encyclopedia. In conclusion, the paperback is no longer the main source of information and entertainment with the invention of modern technologies and the continuous evolution of
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 technology, it can be predicted that in the future physical copy will no longer be available.
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