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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
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service
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 is often seen as an important
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 of our society. Some people think that it should be compulsory for
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 in high school to take
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 in
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 programmes. While doing
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 could have some repercussions, I personally believe that
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 idea would bring more benefits to not only
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 but
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 society. On the one hand, implementing
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 proposal would have some negative impacts on the
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 and
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 involved.
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, being high school
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 means they are already expected to perform well to have academic achievements which are essential to their future careers. If they are made to serve in
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service
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, it might stress them out as they have less free time to recover after studying hard or doing revision for long hours.
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, as those
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 often lack maturity, local charities may have more work in supervising them.
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,
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 of helping charitable organizations, the
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 could be a source of problems.
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, doing unpaid
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service
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 would definitely
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. By taking
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 in those social activities
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 as taking care
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 elderly, teaching sports to younger children, volunteer
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 will probably have great chances to not only develop practical skills
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 as communication but
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 nurture their generosity and empathy with difficult situations of the disadvantaged.
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, charitable organizations have more human resources, allowing them to give more help to people in need and reduce the workload of older volunteers who
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assistance from younger generations. In conclusion,
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 there may be several effects on
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’ performance at school and issues local charities could deal with, I agree that unpaid
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service
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 should be a mandatory
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 the standard curriculum of high schools as its benefits are more significant.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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