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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. Why might this be the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays,
people
 in some parts of the world think being a homeowner is so indispensable compared to renting it.
This
 essay will outline some possible reasons for
this
, as well as I strongly believe it would be a negative situation. The main reason behind
this
 statement is that
people
 are worried about their countries’ economical situations.
For instance
, in developing countries each day the price of homes might increase so that if a family do not buy a house as soon as possible, they fail to purchase it
next
year
; due to the rate of inflation.
Therefore
,
year
 by
year
 the value of money will decline. In the other words, they cannot buy a certain house with the same amount that they had
last
year
.
In addition
, owning a home would be an investment; in fact, the price of their home over time. As a consequence, they can sell their house and buy another one that just ,in
this
 case, it would be possible. I think it probably
create
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 a negative condition because individuals consider it as a way of making money to be rich. Affluent
people
 buy various houses and sell them to gain profits, while, poor families cannot do that.
Hence
 it causes class differences in society and brings poverty. In conclusion, I believe, in the nations where
people
 do not have economic safety, owning a home is very essential,
although
this
 trend would create some issues in the community like more inflation and poverty.
Therefore
, governments should take some measures to control it and provide a good economic condition for all residents.
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