In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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,
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printed books will not be sold as
people
have access to read everything online without spending money to purchase them. I strongly agree with
this
statement because of some reasons.
Firstly
, Thanks to cutting edge technology, access to all publishments have become
more and more easier
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easier and easier
easier

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in
last
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the last

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decades. In the future
people
will stay in their home and read about various subjects
range
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ranging

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from history to medicine just by surfing
on
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the internet. It would be very continent for individuals to find
their
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the

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interest book that they want without wasting time to go to
different
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the different
a different

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bookstore
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bookstores

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to purchase it and sometimes the book will not be found and ones should wait until bookseller order it.
In addition
, online platforms will provide
wide
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a wide

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range of reading sources freely. In
this
way
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,way

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everyone is more likely to take
the
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apply

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advantages
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advantage

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of it without paying money to
buy
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itbuy

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. In fact, it will help poor
people
who are not affordable to read each kind of news and
books
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book

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.
For instance
, online pages will grab everyone
attentions
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attention

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because they can download a book and will
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read

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red
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read

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a couple of pages to see whether they like it or not without paying so that it would be very valuable because it will give them a variety of chooses to opt between them compared to printed books which we have to buy it
first
then
read and
then
maybe they recognize they do not like them. In conclusion, I believe individuals will not buy printed publishment as a consequence of online reading because every news, stories and information will be found in online sources and
people
will not pay for them.
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