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Some countries are considering imposing curfews in which teenagers will not be allowed outdoors at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this policy?

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We reside in a society where good and evil cannot be separated. In our present world, things change at a constant phase with life. Thereby, several nations are planning to adopt severe strict rules and regulations against the youth to curb their activities in the absence of a parent or guardian. I strongly disagree with it as it can cause more harm to their wellbeing as well deprive them of their freedom which is their human constitutional right.
To begin
 with, we should not impose stringent actions against adolescents. Because
this
 can make them lose their faith in their parent and
subsequently
 the government.
As a result
, they will begin to retaliate and make them rebel against the system to obtain more freedom leading them to misuse it.
Thus
, encouraging them to wrongdoings.
For example
, young children could be interested to drink alcohol and use of marijuana, as these contrabands are illegal to use which can have detrimental effects on them.
Therefore
, pushing them to the dark path which was intended to be prevented from
such
 circumstances.
Furthermore
, there are few situations where teenagers need to be restricted. As
this
 is for their safety and being responsible.
For example
, kids love to go to parties which the parents have the right to know the details concerned to it as they are the perfect persons to judge the scenario and come to conclusion.
This
 can help the parent to know their whereabouts and see if it's suitable for their offspring. But the adult will have explained to them nicely the reason without making them upset. In conclusion,
although
 there are some positive aspects of restricting youngsters from loitering around with friends with the elder people, it outweighed them because of the negative impact on the younger generation.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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