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Television Sport shows such as the Olympics are a good source of motivation for our youths who do not like to exercise much. Do you agree or disagree?

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Athletics shows likes
Olympics
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 aired on tv is considered to be a great source of motivation among youngsters who don't have an interest in the workout. In my opinion, I agree that the
Olympics
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 can inspire the younger generation to take up athletics.
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, there are other tv shows like
WWE
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 that might make
youths
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 take up
sports
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.
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, the
Olympics
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 is a grand sporting event which is conducted every 4 years, in which the best athletes are sent by the countries all around the world to represent their nation, and it comprises of various sporting events.
Youths
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 watching all over the world would get a chance to see different sporting events and there is a chance that
youths
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 would get inspired by the
sports
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 which are least popular in their nation.
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, In India canoeing is the least popular, watching the athletes navigate their canoe in fast-moving rapids of the lake might inspire some of the youth to take
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 sport, so
youths
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 inspired by the
sports
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 would train daily in order to excel in sport.
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Olympics
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 inspire
youths
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 around the world it is conducted once every four years, whereas there are sporting events like
WWE
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, Premiere league, and cricket are broadcasted throughout the year, these sport shows might influence the youth to
exercise
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 regularly, as in
WWE
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youths
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 would see wrestlers with well trained, and properly maintained body with appropriate diet plan,
youths
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 idolising these wrestlers, or their favourite footballer, or the cricketer that they like, would witness that they are in proper shape, and it would motivate them to
exercise
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 daily in order to be like them. In conclusion, I believe that
sports
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 shows like the
Olympics
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 inspire
youths
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 to
exercise
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 daily whereas there are other sporting shows which are broadcast daily like the
WWE
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 play a bigger role as the
youths
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 witness these athletes on a daily basis and would take up
exercise
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 and proper diet routine to be like their idols.
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