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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #person’s #culture #character #choice #clothes
A number of
people
 believe that a
person
's interest
on
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in
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closthing
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clothing
closing
 represents his personality as well as his
culture
. It is my view that despite some cultural regulations of clothes,
people
's desire
on
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for
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 their outfits are highly influenced by
fashion
 trends and employer regulations than their personal
charaters
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characters
.
Firstly
 it can acknowledge that some
culturel
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cultural
 believes and traditions
are directly impact
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directly impact
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 on
person
's choice of
cloths
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clothes
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.
For instance
, almost all
the
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religions have their own costume designs and,
people
 have to wear those on some traditional occasions.
Therefore
, under those circumstances, it can
be identify
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perosn's
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person's
culture
 on their selection of dresses. Despite
this
 situation, I believe that human's selections of
theiir
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their
 clothes are directly influenced by new
fashion
 trends rather than their characters.
As a result
 of globalization,
fashion
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the fashion
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 industry rocketed around the world with a huge development. Owing to
this
 situation,
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
 use to purchase latest costume designs which makes them
more
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happier. The impact of
fashion
 updates is not only
reson
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reason
 on
people
's
choic
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choice
 on clothing. They have to select their office
atteires
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attires
batteries
attire
 according to the code of ethics of
relevent
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relevant
 employers.
For instance
, in Sri Lanka, all the women, who are working in
government
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the government
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 sector
hav
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have
 to wear sarees within office hours
accoridung
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according
 to the authority regulations. In conclusion, it can tell very few details about
person's
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culture
 based on their outfit
of
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on
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 several specific occasions.
Nevertheless
, I
belive
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believe
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 that,
leatest
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latest
 fashions
ans
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and
an
 regulatory bodies'
requrements
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requirements
 have a major impact on
person
's choice of clothes than their
culture
 and the
charater
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character
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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