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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tution fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A section of society thinks that the government has to provide free university
education
 to all students.
However
, high priced tuition fees are imposed on them to do their graduation, which every learner cannot
pay out
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. So, in my
opinion
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 tertiary
education
need
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 to be given free for the benefit of students and society. A good reason to abolish university fees is that it gives people whether they are rich or poor equal rights. Nowadays, educatees from low socioeconomic status are not able to do their graduation since
,
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 affordability plays a major role. As a result, most of the learners from
the
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rich background have higher chances of obtaining a degree. If the government continues to impose
such
 exorbitant fees, the inequality will raise rather than
dec rease
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. students
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by providing free tertiary
Therefore
, one way of getting rid of inequality among
education
. Economic benefits are there in imparting free higher completing their higher studies will increase. In
education
 . As a result of it, the density of graduates addition,
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will have its impact
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the development of the certain important branches.A country
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 is in need of improvement in several branches can adopt
free
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 institutional
education
 policy for the betterment of respective branches. For example, France had offered free tertiary
education
 for
the
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medical professionals, which took the country to the
next
 level in providing
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health care
system
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. Now, it is one of the leading countries in offering medical facilities. To conclude , the government ought to take necessary measures and allot
fund
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 to offer free higher
education
. Freeing professional training can demolish inequality and
fasttrack
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fast-track
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 wealth of a nation
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