Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that adolescents have to take part in a

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npaid work to support the n

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in their leisure time. Young adults can gain a lot of skills as well as cater t

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community. But from my p

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I don’t totally agree with

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idea because of c

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of reasons below:

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school students are very busy with their s

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at school. They attend all classes almost every day i

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the week. Many teenagers feel o

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with their homework and examinations each semester.

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, they should be urging play some sports to improve h

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or hang out with peers in their free time.

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, forcing people d

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unpaid work without their willingness is not fail in our society. S

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for young a

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- our future generation. It leads to serious consequences

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as they can feel d

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and cannot complete their task properly.

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, it can affect their perspective they may not don’t keen on social activities when they grow up.

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, I reckon adolescents should g

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involved in local community activities to cater t

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eighborhood.

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It is a good way to learn how to get and give.

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that, a lot of skills and good c

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will be developed. All in all, I don’t agree that all teenagers have to be a volunteer in the community in their spare time without their pressure event thought both government and each individual gain huge of beneficial form

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work.