Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful to protect rare animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Certain people are of the opinion that
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zoo lands

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are dangerous and all the
zoo
parks should be closed. Whilst, others are of the view that
zoolands
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zoo lands

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are important to preserve rural creatures. In my opinion, I strongly believe that
zoos
are advantageous to saving
animals
. On the one hand,
zoos
are cruel if the government
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constructed
constructs

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them in cities that crowed of people.
For instance
, when the
animals
get out
from
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the
zoo
gardens, they will cause many accidents in
streets
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and damage houses, supermarkets and hospitals.
Moreover
, the creatures in the zooparks are dangerous for workers who work in the park.
For example
, some creatures have sharp teethes and nails, so when the workers do their job
such
as washing and feeding some
beasts
attack them for that reason, they must wear thick
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clothes

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and gloves to protect
themselve
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themselves

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.
On the other hand
, I still believe that
zoo
gardens are useful to save
beasts
from extinction. The
zoo
parks give visitors
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to learn about the life of
beasts
and how these
beasts
communicate with their partners.
For instance
, some
beasts
communicate by sounds that they made it.
Furthermore
, these
zoos
create a great place and view that individuals can enjoy their spare time watching
animals
.
For example
, some families bring their children to visit the
zoo
parks to encourage their children to choose their
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favourite

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pets which boosts the kids to be more interactive and more responsible of how to protect their
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favourite

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and other pets from extinction. In conclusion, I am still convinced that
zoos
are important
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protecting rural
animals
from disappearing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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