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Many places in the world rely on tourism as a primary source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Discuss both its advantages and disadvantages.

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In
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 fast-paced life,many efforts have been made to improve touristry;
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, travelling can be a source of problems.While some accept that issue has positive effects on countries , a majority believed that issue has negative impacts.These points of view will be discussed in the following paragraphs. The
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 and foremost reason that industry of touristry has some advantages
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 are able to better to country's economy ;
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,some societies have poor economy because of different reasons
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 as sanctions and inflation ,but they have many natural and attractive resources for travellers,so what used to
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 item they can get more income for their countries.
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,some countries
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 as Brazil and Mexico or even a rich country like Turkey can use the improvement of the tourism industry to keep their country's economy stable.
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,it is clear that why many support
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 point of view.
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 ,there are several disadvantages that travel can
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 be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly.That mean ,if the Government and municipalities are unaware, the city will definitely be seriously damaged ;
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, When people travel, they often forget that it is very important to clean cities and not harm the environment, so they do not seem to cooperate.As an example,Iranian society always has
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 bad habits as if they are angry with the environment and nature ,and unfortunately,mayors do not care about it , so
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 after analyzing
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 fact it is clear why many support
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 claim. In conclusion,we realized the travel industry has some advantages and disadvantages. It causes improved income region ,and It can have irreversible effects, so it is recommended that governments and municipalities provide useful solutions to
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 problem as soon as possible.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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