Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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contemporary
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era,
manufacture
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the manufacture
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of
vehicles
get increased and the demand for
fuel
also
increased and due to
that small towns
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and rural areas which are at far not able to get
the
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enough quantity of that.
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why the find the alternative of
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a
nessesity
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necessity
. Finding the new source
have
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definatly
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definitely
have
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more advantages. Electric
vehicles
are more popular
for
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alternative, it
make
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less
polution
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pollution
in
environment
compare to those
transpotation
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transportation
whic
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which
are run of petrol or
diesal
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diesel
.
Nowdays
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,
the
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electricity
easily
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get
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available to any corner of the nation so it is the best option for
vehicles
and for other machines. We can generate
electricity
from sunlight,
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windpower
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station,
from
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turbine
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and so on. The process of generating the
electricity
is less or
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have zero percentage of
polution
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pollution
in
in
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environment
. Compared to gas and oil,
electricity
is cheaper and anyone can afford it. People no more need to wait to get
fuel
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city
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, they can use
electricity
as
other
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option.
For instance
, after the hike of price of petrol and LPG, people in
rurle
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rural
area not able to afford it and it get more expensive to transport that service to them,
thus
they use electric machines and
vehicles
.
Moreover
, The level or quantity of natural
fuel
are
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getting a less
day
by
day
and using other option of it are more
usefull
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useful
to us and nature, because for more natural gas and oil government need to do
diforestation
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deforestation
reforestation
and that harms the
environment
. Due to cutting trees and woods, the level
or
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heat
incrased
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increased
in
environment
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and that causes
geenhouse
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greenhouse
effect more. Government need to manage more places and need to spend more on the machine to fetch
fuel
from the deep level of
earth
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surface.
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, in Japan
goverment
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government
spend almost 30 billion on fule project and due to that citizens need to suffer from the high price of
day
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to
day
service and products. In
conclution
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conclusion
, finding the new energy source in
aread
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areas
which are have less contact with
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center
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of
city
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is good but that source
not
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need to harmful to us and
environment
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the environment
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and easily available to all of us than it more
benefisial
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beneficial
ratther
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rather
than is
dimerits
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demerits
merits
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • fostering innovations
  • renewable energy sources
  • energy security
  • geopolitical tensions
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental risks
  • habitat destruction
  • irreversible damage
  • perpetuates dependence
  • transitioning
  • indigenous and local communities
  • ethical and social challenges
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